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<p><p><p>I definitely see what you were saying. I should have been more clear in my ending that it was supposed to be Santa. I thought by saying that something was beginning to fly might give the reader a good enough hint to be able to put it together. Thanks for the tips!</p></p></p>
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<p><p><p>The parody works well with current players and themes until you reach the last 3 paragraphs. The rest of the parody is easy to read and understand, but I have tried multiple times to figure out exactly what is going on the last 3 paragraphs and am still scratching my head. Who is creating the snow and Thunder? Who is doing the talking to buck and DD? Santa, God, Cal Ripken Sr., Earl Weaver, the Ghost of Christmas past? Now if you had used somebody like Cal Ripken Sr. that would work out really well in my opinion as DD is trying to revamp the Orioles system just like the old "Oriole Way". The end of the real story is hard to transition, but it reads like you put a lot of thought into the beginning and middle, but just finished the end to be able to post it before Christmas. I was impressed, but it needs that great ending to make it a classic. Just my opinion.</p></p></p>
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<p><p><p>Quite alright with the whole UF thing. I'll hopefully be at UCF not too long from now and all will be forgiven.</p></p></p>
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<p><p><p>I will TRY HARD to Remember !!</p></p></p>
<p><p><p>K?</p></p></p>
<p><p><p>Remind me again I have CRS</p></p></p>